Malkijah
Griffiths
English
201
2/11/15
First
Draft-Essay 1
The healthy Human Being
Health is an extremely powerful word
that in sense can make or break a person’s entire lifestyle. When defining the
state of “health”, one can define it as having their mental, social, and
physical state on a particular level to where they are content and they feel
alive. The term “alive” simply means that a human being is enjoying life and
using their resources to the best of their ability. In the Roxanne Edwards
interview and pictures, it was revealed to its viewers that she is a female
body builder who has a different understanding of health than the other woman in
todays society. The essay “Hard Bodies” by Stuart Ewen gives a description of
body that can be improved and worked to its maximum potential. The video “Cuts:
A traditional Sculpture” by Heather Cassils shows a transgender working to
obtain perfection through multiple aspects of life. Although body building and
extreme workout plans seem detrimental to a person’s health, the people
mentioned previously make their workouts their life and find it essential to
their stability and overall health.
Roxanne Edwards is a female
bodybuilder who’s worth ethic is unimaginable. A typical woman in todays
society is one that wants to make their health better, but doesn’t have the
knowledge or the set of values to make the thought a reality. Usually, men
would be the ones constantly in the gym, pushing themselves to a limit that
they couldn’t even dream of doing. Edwards is a woman who challenged the social
norm and went beyond the bar for women. According to “Roxanne Edwards is
Superhuman”, Roxanne weighs 138 pounds, she can bench press up to 315 points,
and less than 4 percent body fat. Not even some of the strongest male athletes
can push their body to lift the density of those weights. To get to these
insane level of strength, she had to change up her entire diet and lifestyle
for that matter. She began to body build at the age of 30. Roxanne had a plan
for years because she knew that women’s hormones are shifting at that age and
their testosterone level is at a all time high. She had to take steroids to get
where she’s at today. Bodybuilding is essential to her health because she went
through the research and all the vitamins to get to the point where she is now.
When she works out, she feels empowered and she loves the way she looks in the
mirror. No matter how out of the ordinary she looks, she doesn’t mind showing
off her body to the public.
The body can be worked and pushed to
many different levels. Roxanne proved that the sky is the limit when discussing
this matter. To elaborate more on the topic of “health”, one can say that in
order to feel content physically, steps needed to be taken and the person needs
to be consistent. As Stuart Ewen stated in “Hard bodies”, for Raymond H to
achieve his goal, he has to address his body piece by piece (Ewen,62). A person
who goes to the gym and does multiple work-outs at one time will not see any real
results. For the human body to achieve a level of muscle, each part of the body
needs to be worked out on a different day so each part can be significantly
looked at. Furthermore, the gym is only 20% of getting built. A person has to
do calisthenics on their own, have the appropriate amount of vitamins, and
lastly eating the correct protein and disarraying from unnecessary fats. Ewen
mentions in the passage that “an aestheticized tribute to the broken-down work
processes of the assembly line” (Ewen, 62).
Every-day walks and regular daily routines contribute the health of an individual’s
health. Walking for 15 minutes to class instead of taking the bus for 2 minutes
gives a huge push forward to the ultimate goal. Working out is like a job, it
becomes your life and you find yourself second guessing on almost every
decision because of the long-term affect it might have on you.
In todays society, people are
changing and stepping out of their comfort zone. Very frequently, people are
taking part in transformations that suit their comfort ability. A lot of people
in todays environment are not subject to change or they do not want to see
something out of the ordinary. Bodybuilding would usually be considered a man’s
duty and humans would most likely have a normal reaction to them. If women
begin to suddenly increase in size, people would start giving them looks.
Similar to what Roxanne explained in the DISmagazine about the tests that
people would give to prove her strength. When relating this to “Cuts: A
traditional Sculpture” by H. Cassils, he is a transgender who goes through an
everlasting battle every single day of his life. One can say that being a
transgender and a bodybuilder can be detrimental to a human’s mental health
because of the burdens that come with it. Some of those burdens include nonstop
laughter, vicious eye grazes and consistent name calling. However, a strong
mind can easily overcome these harmful gestures. The actions previously stated
would only bother a person who is self-conscious with the actions that they are
doing. As H. Cassils explained in his article, he was working towards a
“self-determined body”. The term “self-determined” mean content and satisfied
to a point where that person doesn’t pay attention to what other people think.
When someone is satisfied with their appearance, the words and the names that unimportant
people call them would be irrelevant.
Health is a term that runs ramped in
the minds of people in todays society. Everyone tries to achieve a certain
level of health that in some ways are looked at as unachievable. In reality,
there isn’t a true definition of health. All three body builders are working
out for the same reason in different ways. Roxanne uses set diets and work out
plans to achieve her goal. Raymond H
uses machinery at his job to his advantage to working out different parts of
his body. Lastly, H. Cassils took certain medication and worked out for a long
period of time to see a variety of results. What these weight lifters have in
common is that they all want to achieve a goal of looking good, while at the
same time defying all odds. Being healthy is state of mind, and if that state
of mind isn’t strong enough, any small inference can stray you away from your
ultimate goal.
1. The thesis statement is "When defining the state of “health”, one can define it as having their mental, social, and physical state on a particular level to where they are content and they feel alive."
ReplyDelete2. The thesis makes a debatable assertion. It is interesting because with this thesis there are several different aspects of health that are described (mental, social, physical). I think the paper can be improved by adding more direct quotes from each work to provide more specific examples when relating the support back to the thesis.
3. The paper has a lot of summary in it which is good to gain background knowledge. As the paper progresses, it touches on each of the main points presented in the thesis and discusses how it effects each of the people used as examples. Each paragraph discusses a different aspect of health. I think more direct quotes from the sources would benefit the paper.
4. By defining how each of the body builders viewed health and their bodies helps related the paper back to the thesis. I am convinced after reading the paper. Again, the paper is very well constructed, I just think more direct quotes would really help add support to the body paragraphs.